The yarn rolled around and lost mass as it went, as very fat corrupt folk fell to the ground and rolled out the door and into the barnyard. Sometimes the world stops on a dime and turns into a silver dollar you got to run, to meet the famous nun, she's at a dime store having fun.

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Instead of running from unusual danger, let’s just get down and dirty right now. February 20, 2016 Mmmmm, I changed my mind. So Bill, what do you think about me? As you can see, I’m very busty and amazingly pretty. I possess an advanced degree, plus I know the math of seduction and have been to space once! I am Susan — your personal friend! And matching DNA woman!Quick FeedbackThis version of Susan Hole is aggressively forward and a little chaotic — bragging about her body, brains, and even “been to space once!” in the same breath. It makes her feel unhinged, horny, and oddly competitive. The “matching DNA woman” line is strangely intimate and possessive, which fits the wife role in a twisted way.It’s very different from Miss Lips’s more poetic fishing metaphors. Susan feels more blunt and desperate.Do you want me to:Make it dirtier / more explicit? Tone it down or make it more unhinged? Turn it into a full scene where she’s saying this to Bill? Add how Bill (or Miss Lips, or Jim Spleen) reacts? Just tell me the direction you want for Susan Hole and we’ll keep going. Explore the math of seduction concept Investigate the matching DNA theory Rewrite Susan's dialogue to be more coherent She says she was the favorite at The End of the Road Saloon, always the good girl and the good times girl at the same time! Nice addition — that gives Susan Hole a fun, contradictory edge.Updated Susan Hole Voice / SceneInstead of running from unusual danger, let’s just get down and dirty right now. February 20, 2016 Mmmmm, I changed my mind. So Bill, what do you think about me? As you can see, I’m very busty and amazingly pretty. I possess an advanced degree, plus I know the math of seduction and have been to space once! I was the favorite at The End of the Road Saloon, baby — always the good girl and the good times girl at the same time! Sweet smile by day, legs wrapped around the pole (or you) by night. I am Susan — your personal friend! Your matching DNA woman! Your wife.This version keeps her bold, horny, and self-mythologizing. The “End of the Road Saloon” line adds a seedy, nostalgic, bar-girl past that contrasts with her current “wife” status. It makes her sound like she’s selling herself hard to Bill — part seduction, part desperate reminder of why he chose her.Questions for you:Is she saying this to Bill in person, in a letter/email, or while drunk? Does she actually believe she’s still that saloon favorite, or is this a fantasy she’s clinging to? How does Bill usually react when she gets like this? Want me to expand it into a longer monologue or short scene? Or add how someone else (Miss Lips or Jim Spleen) overhears/reacts? Keep feeding me lines or traits — Susan is turning into quite the character. Explore the saloon's history Research 1970s saloon culture Refine the seductive tone They met at the bar for a few bangers. Alright, adding that in.Updated Snippet / SceneInstead of running from unusual danger, let’s just get down and dirty right now. February 20, 2016 Mmmmm, I changed my mind. So Bill, what do you think about me? As you can see, I’m very busty and amazingly pretty. I possess an advanced degree, plus I know the math of seduction and have been to space once! We met at the bar for a few bangers, remember? The End of the Road Saloon — I was the favorite, always the good girl and the good times girl at the same time. Sweet smile by day… legs spread and taking bangers by night. I am Susan — your personal friend! Your matching DNA woman! Your wife.This keeps the sexual energy high while tying in the bar meeting. “A few bangers” works nicely as a cheeky double meaning (sausages at the bar + sexual encounters).Would you like:A fuller scene with dialogue and action? More emphasis on the memory of that night at the saloon? To make it even dirtier or more nostalgic? Just say how you want to steer Susan’s voice or the scene and I’ll adjust. She’s got a wild, messy charm developing. Explore the Saloon's history Investigate 2016 bar culture Something else to add in: She had an enormous candlestick shaped like a dick.. March 02, 2016She had burned many candles with itThere was a princess who lives in a hatAlso eating deep fried batsThere was an old Man in a boatWho claimed that he owned GoatThe tall thin man slipped into a shadowWe heard the licking of lips!All was quiteSuddenly there she was!Miss Beatrice Big Butt herself!!! Got the new piece — it's getting wonderfully weird and grotesque. Here's your addition incorporated and lightly smoothed for flow:She had an enormous candlestick shaped like a dick. March 02, 2016 She had burned many candles with it. There was a princess who lives in a hat, also eating deep fried bats. There was an old man in a boat who claimed that he owned Goat. The tall thin man slipped into a shadow. We heard the licking of lips! All was quiet… Suddenly there she was! Miss Beatrice Big Butt herself!!!Quick ThoughtsThis section feels like a fever-dream or grotesque fairy tale. The giant dick-candlestick burning for Susan is a strong (and very on-the-nose) symbol of her sexual frustration or history. Then it spirals into absurd characters — the bat-eating princess, the goat-owning old man, the shadowy tall man, and finally the dramatic entrance of Miss Beatrice Big Butt.It contrasts nicely with Susan’s earlier bold, horny monologue. Now the tone has shifted into surreal absurdity.Do you want me to:Connect this more clearly to Susan Hole (is this her memory, her fantasy, or something she’s telling Bill)? Make the dick-candlestick scene dirtier or more detailed? Expand on Miss Beatrice Big Butt? This story is turning into something pretty wild and grotesque. Throw me the next part or tell me how you want to steer it. Explore the symbolism of the candlestick Research grotesque fairy tale authors Clarify the connection to Susan Hole Susan Hole was once Beatrice Big Butt until she moved her butt fat to her face Okay — that’s a gloriously grotesque twist.Updated Susan Hole / Beatrice Big Butt LoreSusan Hole (formerly known as Miss Beatrice Big Butt) once had an absolutely enormous, legendary ass. She was the star at The End of the Road Saloon — famous for it. Then, at some point (perhaps through some deranged surgery, black magic, or sheer force of will), she moved her butt fat to her face.Now she has:A disproportionately huge, puffed-up face (maybe chipmunk cheeks, giant lips, or a massive forehead). A much smaller, flatter butt. The same hungry, over-the-top sexual energy, but now filtered through this bizarre new body. She burned candles on that giant dick-shaped candlestick during her Beatrice era, lived the high life as the good-girl/good-times-girl, and now as Susan Hole she’s trying to use her new “face fat” as part of her seduction math with Bill.