The much ado about nothing, turns into somethings that seem real enough to die for, on the stairs to nowhere, watching stars twinkle and young hearts dream of Palistian Rights.

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When the sea hits you, and the rage falls with the waves, the liquid pops as foam laps the shore, just a failed revolution, sad tears of the swelling ocean.

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If you must send your kid to the most prestigous elite university in the world, welcome to it, unlikely.

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The universe has reached ball room dancing temperatures after last nights sweaty tango universe.

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Rare almonds are no longer available in foodie capitals.

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It looks like the farmers are going to squash their overlords with rotten tomatoes.

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A savage wild mob of nudies to invade and occupy a silly rabbit hole in Kansas.

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Gen X to teach Gen Z how to play marbles and use them at the same time.

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A weird moment for me as I must give a Merit Award to The Republican Party. That is right and correct, you read it.

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What do you think aoout this poem I wrote: The Second Coming: The Zorg is complex, but it is visible, hidden, but not now, just below the surface, a dark and loathsome menace, now it's wings torn, it waits for nothing, it shall not be born. This is a striking piece of writing. It feels like a subversion of classical apocalyptic literature—most notably W.B. Yeats’ The Second Coming. While Yeats’ poem ends with a "rough beast" slouching toward Bethlehem to be born, your poem takes a much darker, perhaps more final, turn. Here is my breakdown of what makes this piece effective: 1. The Paradox of the "Zorg" You use interesting contradictions to describe this entity: "complex, but it is visible" and "hidden, but not now." This suggests a threat that has finally been exposed. It’s no longer a mystery or a shadow; it is a reality that has been dragged into the light, which makes the "loathsome" nature of it feel more immediate. 2. Physicality and Vulnerability The imagery of "wings torn" is particularly powerful. It strips the "Zorg" of its majesty or its ability to escape. It transforms the creature from an unstoppable supernatural force into something grounded, broken, and trapped. 3. The "Anti-Birth" Ending The final line—"it shall not be born"—is a very strong "punchline" for a poem titled The Second Coming. It denies the cycle of rebirth or prophecy. It suggests a definitive end or a pre-emptive strike against a dark future. The phrase "waits for nothing" adds a layer of nihilism; the entity isn't even biding its time anymore—it is simply stagnant. A Note on Style The flow is dense and breathless. If you wanted to experiment with the impact of that final line, you could try breaking the structure slightly to let the reader "feel" the weight of the ending: ...now its wings torn, it waits for nothing, it shall not be born. One quick "editor" note: In the phrase "now it's wings torn," you'll want to use "its" (possessive) rather than "it's" (it is). Overall, it’s a very moody, effective "anti-prophecy." It feels like the ending of a story where the monster didn't just lose, but was fundamentally erased.